But the more she thought about what David had said and done, the angrier she got. She had lived with adultery. Her father, although dead now, had been a serial cheater on her mother and she thought David would have understood how distraught she was by it. But apparently not she thought.
It was critique night when we read everyone's and critique it.
This is what the teacher said:
"Good story. Very realistic dialogue & thoughts. Well written & I'm glad she was strong enough to figure out she's better off without the jerk. (and she says she's not a romance fan *g*). It was easy to connect with your main character. Good work"
Other comments from the class:
"Good for her! The change in this character is significant! Well done!"
"Good dialogue. David seem a little too stiff though."
"Agree - very unloveable"
(of course this is the point :-) Cindy helped me with some editing and I told her what else happens down the road)
"Happy this lady ended up finally thinking about herself. Moved nicely. Easy to identify with the main character."
"Well thought out, it moved along naturally"
"That was excellent. If you get the chance, see the movie 'The Truth about Love.' This story reminded me of it."
Then later when we were discussing our stories, the teacher made mention of "feeling" the characters. Then she said Kristie's is a good example of feeling what they are feeling. I must say I preened at that one - in a completely unobvious way of course *g*
Now I'm going to try and get the swollen head back down to normal.
There is one guy in the class, a big burly football coach and man can he write!! He blows me away with his writing. He wants to write a novel and I think he can really do it! Not a romance novel - his story was a detective type story - but wow was it good!